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Anyone wanna rate my Poem?

I just wrote this, just because. No particular reason.

I just want to broadcast my writing skills and get feedback.

The poem following is, in my opinion, pretty contrversial, but meh , take it how you please.
PS: I rhyme alot. ;p

[header]Title: Sweet America[/header]

Sweet home Alabama,
sweet like a banana.
Hey, honey, go get the camera.
We're finally home to cities like New York, to Los Angeles, to Atlanta!

Welcome to the place,
where ignorance is sprayed in your face, like mace.
But don't get me wrong,
its a wonderful place!

Ignorance and Love,
or should I say: hate
is not more than true happiness, Innate.
I just hope you don't forget about our other resident: the African-American male inmate.
He lives in a wonderous cell, of which America has destined him to be: [i]fate[/i].
"Oh you want to be free? Making this request 400 years later is much much too late."

Sweet home America, where the grasses are fake
the water is blue, and the people luxuriate themselves like drunkards on bottles of sake.
The mountains are tall, the horizon is over the wake: there is plenty of Mary Jane to go around,
we can all get baked.

The four fathers: the tillers of greatness have made this place a wonderful state.
the fruit of the land of milk and honey, of which they ate,
I bid you adieu, and hope to see you again mate.

[header2]THE END[/header2]