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arocroc

[quote=RoflPandar]"feel free to comment on what you think"
I think that this is terrible.
There is no background, and the foreground just looks like a slanted metal bar.
The story line is not well developed and does not have good transitioning.
The scene that happens to do have a background has no foreground and has nothing to do with the storyline.
This comic seems to promote theft and no need for self control. "WE LOVE STEALING, therefore we go stealing."[/quote]

ugh it's not a metal bar its edge of the boat in mp3 T.T anyways no there is not much of a storyline, it's just a short comic o.o. I'm not promoting(at least not trying to promote) anything, I just added that at the end, it's just a short comic that you read, if you liked it then u liked it, if you didn't like it then you didn't. How would you suggest I fix these problems >.<? You don't need to go into thought about what it's promoting and how it was thought about or anything. Anyways, suggestions? Also if you think the storyline was so bad, then pm me and give me an idea to turn into a comic with what you want to happen, I'll send it to you first then you tell me what I should change, after that I'll sumbit it and hopefully that would be better.

Reply December 7, 2011 - edited

RoflPandar

"feel free to comment on what you think"
I think that this is terrible.
There is no background, and the foreground just looks like a slanted metal bar.
The story line is not well developed and does not have good transitioning.
The scene that happens to do have a background has no foreground and has nothing to do with the storyline.
This comic seems to promote theft and no need for self control. "WE LOVE STEALING, therefore we go stealing."

Reply December 7, 2011 - edited

arocroc

[quote=pinksinsftw]I don't like that the panels look uneven throughout. I prefer neat and not all over the place.
The story isn't the best. I'm sure you did your best trying to pull something funny, but it didn't work for me and quite a few others. Also, there's no smooth transition between the thieves and the fight. Something along the lines of "10 seconds later" and maybe another scene in which someone stops the fight and pauses to look back at the treasure in between would make the progression a tad smoother, although probably not funnier.[/quote]

Well I was going to them stopping, checking and better transitions, but it was going to be too long so i decided not to. My shark comic got really messed up because of it's size >.< if you were to look at it you would notice how awful it is and how there is missing text from the first panel. As for my neatness, I would have to measure how much I cut and all that stuff evening it out, I just make em and put em together, I'm sorry for the neatness it is just when i make these I am in a rush and don't actually pay too much attention, plus I like it when panels are like this, the even squares remind me of old comics I'm just not too fond of it. Sorry for it not being neat but whatever .

Reply December 6, 2011 - edited

pinksinsftw

I don't like that the panels look uneven throughout. I prefer neat and not all over the place.
The story isn't the best. I'm sure you did your best trying to pull something funny, but it didn't work for me and quite a few others. Also, there's no smooth transition between the thieves and the fight. Something along the lines of "10 seconds later" and maybe another scene in which someone stops the fight and pauses to look back at the treasure in between would make the progression a tad smoother, although probably not funnier.

Reply December 6, 2011 - edited

arocroc

[quote=greatgodkt]could have think better plots[/quote]

Well the thing is, there isn't really supposed to be tough thinking plots or anything, it's just a short comic. If you find a way that I can improve it or if you even have an idea of your own, just mail me the idea. I'll even friend you so we can chat about it if you would like to discuss your topics better

Reply December 6, 2011 - edited

tommy899

Your comics aren't that good...

Reply December 6, 2011 - edited

greatgodkt

could have think better plots

Reply December 6, 2011 - edited

qq510610623

[quote=hsdrop0ut]Another crappy comic done by you, not surprised.[/quote]

instead of complaining i dont see u trying to make a comic
go make one and see if you can make a better one first

Reply December 6, 2011 - edited

arocroc

[quote=jstn]i think this was just slightly better than the other ones, but dont get the last panel :0[/quote]

Basically, the last panel was supposed to be that the two pirates screamed so loud, that all the way from wherever da heck these other guys were, they heard it.