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Story "Safe and Sound" I wrote

Hi Basil,
I wrote a story I wanted to share with you guys, I believe it is one of my best works, and I am in 7th grade.

C&C please.

Enjoy!

"Safe and Sound"
The feeling of entering paradise delighted the naïve tourists as they gazed out the airplane window. As the next few minutes passed, the only sounds emitted from the aircraft aisle were crying baby squeals, and, conversations about the spectacular climate. Of the hundreds of plane passengers, not one wasn't exhilarated to taste the freedom of the tropical villages and resorts. As the Boeing 727 set its wheels upon the rocky runway asphalt, a smell of palm trees and ocean current infatuated the visitors of their destination. Families marched off the plane in a style similar to a soldier in a parade; but in the back of the plane, one disheveled family of five wobbled off the aircraft, struggling to locate their youngest. The eldest, Luke, knew this adventure was just unwrapping.
Luke checked his phone; it was a quarter after one. The plane was half an hour early, which signaled the man chauffeuring their limousine wouldn't be waiting - or so he thought. The rowdy family made a trip to baggage claim like a mechanical bull ride; not very straightforward. The family collected their baggage and head over to the limo pick-up. As Luke anticipated, the man was a tardy, but only by about five minutes. The islander man assisted them in loading their luggage into the trunk, but Luke denied his help, insisting he was capable of it himself. The family climbed in the limo, it's comfortable, leather seats, and collection of wines and snacks piling the walls of the limo seemed like they just wanted to jump right into Luke's mouth. Luke's youngest brother, Matt, reached over to take a sip of a glass bottle of chardonnay, but his mother slapped his hand away screeching, "Stop! That's a big boy drink, Mattie," followed by a yawn.
Luke chuckled over the scene, and followed the lead of the middle child, Alan, who was staring out the fragile glass windows and admiring the scenery. As the picturesque scene turned into a town full of restaurants and gift shops, Luke turned away, to be greeted by a "Are we there yet?" by Matt.
"No, Matt, we won't be for awhile. The airport is around an hour away from the Atlantis," Luke replied.
After forty grueling minutes of Alan and Matt asking pointless questions because they thought it was humorous, they arrived at the Atlantis Hotel. The hotel workers gladly took their luggage on a cart into the large tower called "The Reef". As their dad signed in, Luke worked up a conversation with one of the men, and found out all about the hotel and its features. As their dad barged in and excitedly said "Who's ready to visit our room?" the two younger kids replied, "Me, Me!"
The parents chuckled and moved into the elevator, as Luke bid adieu to the worker, rushing to catch the elevator. The elevator shot up the building faster than a bullet, and before they knew it, the key card slid in, and slid out. Their room was unlocked. The younger ones rushed and jumped on the bed whaling "DIBS! No, I got here first! MOOOM!"
The family unpacked, and head out to see the features this hotel had to offer. The beach was closed at that moment, but it would be the first place that Luke would visit in the morning. The kids ran ahead, Luke having to catch up to them and hold their hands. The hotel had many pools, slides, casinos, arcades, and photo-ops. Luke wasn't old enough to gamble, so he went to the arcade and pretended to gamble instead. Then, the family head off to their bedroom for the first night.
The first thing Luke heard were squeals of joy and his brothers getting their bathing suits on. "Finally, I can go to the beach," Luke thought.
He got his bathing suit on and head to the beach, and grabbed five chairs for the family. Within 20 minutes, his entire family was sitting under chairs, or playing in the sand. After about an hour, his parents said, "Luke, I am going to go back to the room for a bit, I think I have sun-poisoning... your father is asleep, and he won't want to be woke up. Can you watch your brothers for a little while?"
"Sure, go rest in the room, mom," Luke sweetly replied.
"Thank you, play safe, boys," his mother muttered while racing up to the comfortable room.
After about half-an-hour, Matt nudged Luke and asked "can we go to the pool?" Luke nodded, and he gathered Alan and in the pool.
Five minutes later, Luke asked Matt, "Where is Alan...?" Matt shrugged and jumped back into the pool, playing with his new friends.
This is where the tension rose; Luke freaked out and couldn't bear to tell his parents that he had lost one of them! He took Matt by the arm and went on a dog hunt for Alan, searching places stupid, smart, and obvious. The redness on Luke's face was comparable to a Valentine's Day card. Underwater, over water, and all around the park the two searched with no luck. He had to tell his father.
"...Dad?"
"Yes, son?"
"Do you know where Luke is...?"
"No, I thought you were watching him?"
"I lost him... did he come to you?"
"No..." A long pause occurred, followed by a, "Ha-ha, I'm just joking. He came to me and asked if I could walk him to the room. You are a very courageous and mature boy for asking me, though, Luke. I'll be sure to talk with Alan about leaving without consulting you in the future."
A deep sign of relief was visible on every part of Luke's face, as a smile appeared out of nowhere. The day was saved by his father. Luke and Matt went back into the pool and frolicked around carelessly until they got hungry, when the entire family head off to one of the restaurants. Alan learned his lesson on being safe, and Luke became a little more mature that afternoon, knowing everyone was safe and sound.
As the evening twilight turned into a marvelous night sky, the visitors calmly strolled back into their rooms, to sleep. And when they awoke, the still-damp grass was full of playing children, the lobby full of early birds and people checking in and out. Luke woke up, and checked the bed next to him; his brothers curled up, safe and sound.