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getting better, but still kinda weird

Learn2edit.

No seriously, the quality and editing of the comic is pretty bad.

This story is waaay to cliché. Sorry.

[quote=Royale]You need to do a lot of work to this comic to make it better. [Improve the plot, the characters, and the visuals. (I'll only touch up on the visuals, since many already pointed out the mistakes.] Organization would be something that would make this comic a lot better. Keep the borders and spacing constant, not randomly placed and sometimes connecting and then end up disconnecting. I also suggest you ditch the random Ludibrium background because it just looks terrible when you try to repeat it. Make the header a bit smaller, you seem to waste too much space just for big words and a simple character. You can try to align the maps to make it more appealing, and stop making the panels too big.[/quote]

Read my previous posts. Episode 4 and beyond will have a different banner (Detailed, more organized, slightly smaller). It will also have a different background which doesn't look that bad when repeated, since it's mirrored at parts where it must be repeated so it inverts instead of cutting off. The panels I'm not going to change, because with them not being all aligned, it gives it a bit of a more unique design instead of just in a straight line, which I find kinda boring. The placing of the panels shouldn't be THAT confusing. It's simply read normally, left to right, up to down, just like a regular comic.

Thank you for your criticism.

I hate how they're all color coded. I mean, pink hair and pink clothes?
Blue hair and clothing?
As far as the characters look, they're pretty lame. At least the story isn't as bad as before.

Just to let everyone know, Character Applications are up!
Details can be found here
http://www.basilmarket.com/forum/1634789/1/Extrusion_Comic_Character_Applications.html#

I'm just going to be blunt and honest. The characters have about as much personality as blocks of wood. The plot is a tad bit cliche, as elemental orbs has honestly been overdone in general.

"My name is _____. I am capable of controlling water. That includes freezing water."

That dialogue honestly made me feel like a mentally challenged kid who was being explained every detail of this comic.
The sleeping scene wasn't needed either.

Recommendation: Improve the plot, the dialogue, and the characters.

As for the visual aspect, I wouldn't know what to say, as I have little experience in that area.

[quote=xVedris]Panel arrangement is messy. If you're going to put a background in your comic (behind the panels), then make sure it looks nice when it's repeated.[/quote]

I already made Episode 3 before I had those kind of criticism. After this episode, the Banner and Background was changed to look a bit better. The background also looks better when repeated also.

The one who's thinking that Syaoron sleeping randomly is supposed to be funny, it isn't supposed to be like that. You'll find out what's wrong in a couple of new episodes.

Also, the one who's thinking of the Cloud supposed to be from Dragonball Z and the Orbs being the Dragon Balls, no, that's not the case. I just enjoyed the Cloud Mount and decided to use it here.

Bersemiah I came up randomly in my head. I've never played Grand Chase before. If they're really that similar, then that's purely a coincidence.
The "Ber" part I just added to extend the whole name, with "Mesiah" which is "Savior" changed to Semiah. I switched the S and the M since something related to that is gonna happen near the end.

Reedwarrior, no, this is Episode Three. Episode Two is up, it just wasn't Front Paged. D:<

Panel arrangement is messy. If you're going to put a background in your comic (behind the panels), then make sure it looks nice when it's repeated.

'Bersemiah' kinda sounds like the continent 'Bermesiah' from Grand Chase, or maybe it's just me.

Isn't this suppose to be Episode Two? lol...

[quote=beliver4ever]You're new comic has better quality,but thats because the panel number is low... He has about 2 times more panels then ur comic.
But the effects on this series,specially episode 1,are better then ur comic series,then again,u did only 1 episode..[/quote]

Personally, I think that the paneling is badly done. There is equal space between panels, but the panels are not lined up in the same row. It looks ugly, especially with the banner. I think he needs a cleaner banner, and he needs to make his panels line up in a row.
Plus, I think that the tiles he used for the ground is a little off. I use Kirimy's maps on his blog, and they're nice. Some things here looks a little dull.

I actually like this series. Now, let's see if mine can compete.
I like how the story is developing. I'm trying out a new style for my comics.

[quote=beliver4ever]2 things,
Don't advertise ur new comics on this guy's comics -.-
second,why do you think ur rivals? its not rivalry if this guy's comics are way better then urs[/quote]

Lol, I PMed him already, declaring it. Compare the image quality and the effects. The second episode is already in to Mr.Basil.

ohhhh lolol ifrit <3
i wan be new character T.T
lolol

Hm, nice move.
My rival.
(No, really, I'm just making this over-dramatic.)

No, but the first episode of my series is out.

Aang > Sayaoron

OT: Nice comic.

I smell Avatar waterbender! XD

Lol I might like that new character...

If the sleeping part was supposed to be funny then... Ouch.
Though, if its going to appear later on as some kind of mental illness that either character has (girl hallucinates or guy has a psychological problem), then bravo.