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Narrow the chin line and the waist line. Outline the thighs more. Her hind legs adjust because there is a bend. Add some black or red to her nails and you will have basilers staring at their computer screen for hours.

it looks traced

She has three toes.

Very nice! The angle of her right quad should be adjusted a bit.

people call her fat, cuz even though her face is pretty, the space left around her face, show alot of skin, which makes them think shes is abit chubby
also, her neck should be a lil longer, (no neck=fat?)
put more curves on them thighs too ;D

Thanks for all the useful comments and suggestions I'd thank everyone who posted things individually, but I don't want to be too obnoxious and quote too many people. But @alexie828 you really spent a good amount of time pointing important things out, so thanks a lot to you especially! >_<

she kinda looks like that girl from the online gamer.

But either way the picture is great.

[quote=BroaCNTB]orgasm face[/quote]

Made me chuckle. Good Try!

I love the way you drew her hair. c: It's really pretty, but it kinda stands out a lot compared to the rest of your drawing because it's been lined differently(not all black). The shading on the part of her robe that covers the back of her leg could have been better, as well as not as..straight-ish(i don't know) since it seems a little flat and I had a slight difficulty making out the shape of her leg. I really like all the little designs you put on though. c: And the feet need more defined toes, but I understand that they can be difficult to draw sometimes. xD

Alright honey, first of all, I went through most of these comments and I'm telling you now, [i]do not take most of them to heart.[/i] She's not skinny, but she's not fat either. She is a bit beefy in her arms and face, but that's just something to learn from this time. Everyone has a skinny, sexy Hilla in their mind so they can't accept the fact that someone didn't draw her like a dead tree.

Love the overall composition and choice of colors. I think it's far more dramatic, in the style done here, to have her skin uncolored. It provides stark contrast from her bright hair and bold clothes. My comment about the coloring is that it is not consistent in contrast throughout. The hair provides greatest contrast in reds and the background is rich in colors of various values, but the rest of the shading on her clothes looks fuzzy and weak.

Her overall anatomy is pretty good, but her pose doesn't seem natural. I mean, it is, but it looks like propping herself up is taking a lot of work with the way her weight is distributed across her torso and shoulders. When you draw poses that has the hips curving, look for where all the weight is and make sure your picture portrays it. Hilla is lounging in front of her "subjects," so she's bound to be lazy about it. You drew her breasts very well. (Pardon me for saying, but you can't imagine how hard it is to actually make them decent. Or maybe you can.) Very good fingers too, although the knuckles are a bit messy. Her thighs and legs need more curves though. Women tend to have very curvey legs, but these looks more straight and angular. Her right hip isn't quite bent properly and the bump isn't curving in the right way. Look at your model again and you'll see. I think the fact that her legs are straight, and the overlapping leg isn't quite properly placed, contributes to that. Still, the pose looks reasonably correct at first glance and it's only because I'm nitpicking that I'm pointing this out. I love her face and expression too, but I think her cheeks and chin should have more curves in it. If the bones are more prominent, her face will look more dramatic. Her mouth should probably be a little lower too and her chin raised to show more of her neck. Her nose is technically correct, but it looks odd without the shading of her nose. If you don't play to color skin, make the nose-holes less prominent. Also, she has three toes, but I'm sure it was just a bout of laziness near the end of the picture. xD Next time, consider drawing all the toes!

The folds on her skirt don't seem as correct though. Usually, draping fabrics will follow the curvature of her thighs as well as the sharp edge of the surface she's sitting on. Same goes for the fabric in the back too. It shouldn't extend straight from her hips, but should fall behind her thighs with the way it is positioned. The fabric she is sitting on seems fine though.

I absolutely love the skeleton hands on the bottom. Again, they contrast greatly from Hilla and the rest of the picture, so it really stands out. They are well-drawn too.

The background is really nice too, but I feel like the clouds in the sky should have been outlined, since everything else was. It looks odd to have fluffy airbrush clouds in the sky when everythign else is so bold and pronounced.

These were simply things that came to mind when I saw this. It's a lovely picture with a great idea behind it. It certainly deserves a +1 like. I look forward to more art from you and more improvement, of course. Don't take the harsh comments people say to mind. If all they can only say is "She looks fat," then they really do not know enough about art to give thoughtful and constructive criticism. You're doing great, and I thought you should know it. I just want to help you get better.

I like it alot but.. the chin is a bit too long

The thigh on the leg on top is a bit demented

Her face really bugs me

On Hilla:
- The lineart in some parts are thicker than others.
- Her right shoulder is a bit broad.

On the skin (some suggestions):
-If you're going for a "pale-ghost white" skin, I suggest a seme-grey-ish-purple or blue.
-If you're going for a "Far-white light" skin, I suggest a peachy-orange.

Overall it's really good.

@DopeReligion: Because apparently not being a twig makes you a fat slob. Oh men~

I don't know why but I really like the hair. The legs and toes are kind of weird, though.

Adding to ibrahim,
Things to notice:
-Her shoulders are a little bit too broad compared to the rest of her body
-The face is a little bit too angular
-The two previous factors along with her red hair reminds me of one of my male friends Jesse
-Her arms are large compared to her thighs, which brings up more masculine traits. However, this is most likely caused by her left thigh being slightly dented.
-The line art appears very thick, bold and angular at some parts, while other areas are fine

[EDIT] Maybe it's just that my Asian body is smaller and more slender than that
IDK, people come in many shapes and sizes

However, at least your art work is improving, after flipping through your previous works, so appreciate it. Also, it's good to have a variety of genres of art on Basil Market, because not all art has to be anime styled, where the head to height ratio and all makes everyone look thin.

@WhatUpTupac:
@ibrahim65432:
Welcome to Basil, where misogynistic idiots can't appreciate the curves of a woman's body (even in drawing form). Does every figure in an art piece have to be stick-thin?

OT: You're showing some apparent improvement from your earlier work, and that's definitely something to be proud of. Some of your line-art is a bit inconsistent though, more regarding the thickness of the lines. Tone in the flesh would have been nice too, but I think it makes it stand out a bit more like this.

Keep drawing!

The girl in the picture is fat and not as good looking as the real Hilla. Also I do think basil should have a rule about showing pictures of people who is showing their skins because there is many kids in basil that are not allowed to see these photos. Yes I do know I am a terrible drawer and a really mean person but in order for someone not to do the same mistake we need to be strict. If we go easy and say like its okay and you just messed up here and there then yeah you might think its okay and do it again later.

Some points to point out:
-chin is too much showing.
-Needs more circular face.
-Hair is not well drawn.
-Her hand is not well drawn.
-Her shoulder part needs to be a tiny bit thinner.
-She needs to be more darker colored.
-She needs a lip stick.

The good thing about the drawing:
-Good back ground.
-Unclothed areas all completed.
-Weapon nicely drawn.
-Legs and armor is well drawn.
-Everything is well drawn except the face.

Good drawing but she's ugly in this.

chin is too long; gives impression of double chin.

The only criticism I can give is that the contortion of the lower body seems a little strange; her abdomen looks like its facing straight at us while her hips are already twisted at a 90 degree angle.

But still, this is a really good drawing; give yourself a pat on the back for drawing it through; even with the white skin I'd tap that WAHAHA <3

Something about the cheeks, maybe the nose makes it look weird- like there isn't that sexual appeal lol (face), might be the way her nose and mouth is positioned, but that might be just me. Other than that, I like it! I think you did a good job on the hair

it looks pretty amazing

such manly arms.

and i believe your legs are a bit to long.

I think the details were nicely done however the only two things that bug me are the skin and the face. The skin just looks way too pale (since you didn't colour it in) but it would look better if you did maybe a bit of shading on that part. And the face... Not sure how to explain it. It's not ugly nor does it make her look fat but there's just something about it that makes it look a bit odd.

Oh and don't take the comments too seriously just learn from them.

It's okay I guess, but:
-It would look a lot better if you colored the skin
-The face makes her look fat (no offense). Try to make it a little smaller, open her eyes, and draw a nose instead of two slits.
-The legs are way too long

<3 Amazingly done! Love the skele hands, her fabric, spears, and background and all the little details.
Must be really demoralizing huh? These comments </3

Looks like a man.
I thought hilla was a women...?

Some of the comments in this thread need to die. She's not fat. Her face looks fine. I can obviously see you left her skin white on purpose and that's your choice as the artist.

Everyone on basil just wants gigantic anime eyes all over the place. Please get out.

It's well done and is a great improvement. I suggest you start creating your own poses again. I think it's just better if you know how to make poses on your own. Unless you're hoping modeling will help you learn or something :O

The hair could be thicker at the top (it looks like a triangle, putting it one way), and more contrast/highlights in it would make it stand out, as the focus here is on Hilla, rather than the background/hands.

Her head looks like it's drawn separately and stuck onto the body with a short neck, hence that's mainly why she looks 'fat'.
The her right thigh's right outline bends inwards too much to have a shape (should stick out a little more? dunno, it just looks straight). The legs are a little bit too long compared to the upper body.
Her left waist seems.. not consistent? It looks like her left thigh disappeared as well.

You might want to practice more on facial features, mainly the cheekbones-nose-mouth sections and how they connect to each other. She looks like she has a big chin .
Oh, and the widow's peak looks alright, but there's 'sudden' hair growing out of place...?

IMO:
The wing things on the back are too high, and as this is somewhat irl-ish, you can make it bigger/striking (oh, and angle it more clockwise, in line with the back). The staff could be thicker as well, I wouldn't want to hold a thin metal pole when I'm facing a fight .

I love the rest of the details you put into the drawing, they're amazing. The skeletal hands are part of what makes this drawing unique.

Face reminds me of Adele ._.

cant be unseen

what... the... ....

I guess this is a lot to ask on Basil, but please do be kind x_x... I'm sure there are plenty of small mistakes, but I'd rather hear about large scale criticisms (like coloring issues, line art, etc.) rather than "she looks fat" or "she's ugly." Something a little more useful, I suppose. It would allow me to improve more in the future, and wouldn't clutter the comments. Thank you!

EDIT: Since some people have mentioned it, yes, the skin is white. Like, there's absolutely no color. Plain white. I suck at coloring skin, so in most of my more recent drawings, all the people have white skin. Saves me time and hassles lol. Just clarifying ><

She looks like she's one of my Hoes.

She looks way too pale, would be better if you colored in the skin.
Anyway, I love the way you drew her clothes, especially that loincloth <3

[quote=WhatUpTupac]She looks fat [/quote]

First thing I thought :x

awesome job, her cheeks bug me though

Just needs freckles and she can be a ginger.

EDIT: UGH HATE THIS. Since i cant like/rate yet +1 from me.