sup basil how is my poem
so i wrote this poem
i see it
or do i?
a distant mirage on the horizon
like a fading desert
the infint grains of sand slipping through my fingers
so yeah
im kind
tripping right now. and. im not sure if its good or like terrible or what so./ yeah. what do you think. <3
edit:i mean tripping like tripping over a tree branch lolol
March 25, 2013
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So i ask you, does this poetry have a concept?
It'd be easier to comprehend if you have one in mind.
w0ah that was so deep. like it's in your hands, but it's slipping away. damn. i have so many feels right now man.
Uhhmm I'm not one for poetry at all but I can understand poetry for the most part and honestly that wasn't very powerful
Maybe get all sad and stuff then try again
@jedi come to the dark side!
May the force be with you.
@jedi i shall grant you permission to turn it into a song young padawan
Can I turn it into a song?.
Your poetry strikes me,
Like a dull spoon on the skull.
My head aches in awe,
As I try to comprehend.
What is this.
@altersniper okay...im having trouble understanding what youre saying. but i think i get it.
response: i like taking walks through the woods but often times they are bad for me so i dont take walks in the woods very often. but ha you are wrong because i am not trying to land a dream job and the only drug test im going to fail is the one my parents are making me take......
pretty less than average for a ametuar poet
wtf is this?
this isn't a suitable love poem.
i am disappoint.