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Cmon Basilers help me with my grammar

Yes it's my crappy English essay
[b]I doubt many of you will read it, but it be appreciated if you read a few sentences and tell me my mistakes and how I could make it better[/b]
[b]What would you give it out of 10?[/b]

Words can be our strength or weakness. R. Kipling describes words as a drug because they are similar. Just like words, drugs can change people's behaviour. They can affect us in a positive or negative way. Words have the power to influence our thoughts, actions, and emotions.
Our thoughts always change when we hear or have conversation. In the play "Othello", written by William Shakespeare, Othello's state of mind changes throughout the play. When Iago says "She did deceive her father, marrying you", it changes the way Othello thinks of Desdemona; no longer pure and innocent. Tim James from the campaign ad tries to change our thoughts also. He talks about driving test being in English which is arguable. If we heard someone say that driving test should be only in English, we would think that they were prejudice. After listening to the campaign ad it seems plausible when he says "it makes sense" because it makes you think, if road signs are all in English, shouldn't the test be in English too?

Words can cause a people to do thing that they would have never done before. They can be for good or for evil. For instance, Othello from the Play "Othello", written by William Shakespeare, is convinced that Desdemona is part of adultery. Iago's wicked words persuade Othello in to believing Desdemona is having an affair with him. These words cause Othello to murder Desdemona. An action that was beneficial was the Civil Rights Movement. Martin Luther's speech "I Have a Dream" amazed everyone and helped implement civil rights. Without his powerful words, we would not have the freedom we have today. Both these examples show how people's actions become dangerous or valuable.
Emotions can change when you know or don't know the language other people speak. Just like in the song "Hey There Delilah", by the Plain White T's. The song makes you feel happy, but one word can alter your emotions. Delilah is mentioned in the Hebrew Bible and is considered a "gold digger", who uses people for money. After knowing that, your emotions completely change from happy and joyful to pity and sorrow for the person in love with Delilah. Another example would be Mamacita from "No Speak English" by Sandra Cisneros. Since Mamacita does not understand the words that are being spoken to her, she feels depressed. The quote "She sits all day by the window" shows that she anti-social and alienated which would make anyone depressed.
The potential power words have is unimaginable. Words can control on how we think. We can think decent and pure thoughts to evil and tainted thoughts and vice versa. They can cause us to harm others with our actions and change the way how we feel simultaneously.