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@Spirit:

Yayyyy
okay, i see great improvement everytime you repost to show your corrections Did you forget to fix the ear also?
Btw, i personally do not recommend using bright colourful colours as your background when you're colouring the focal point of this picture. It greatly hinders your ability to choose colours. Use dull colours like earth-ground, mud/sand brown on a separate layer, paint the lady, then go ahead and paint the background.

Just like @MarxMaster said, you still have to change the eyebrows and maybe remove the random white line on the nose.

i anticipate for what great works you would continue to show. <3

Sorry for the lack of update! Been keeping quiet because I didn't want to bump the thread without having something to show for it, haha.

@Razorslash: Nice to see you again! You're like my savior for my art <3
@Boullion: Thanks for the critique- I think I hit most of your points, except the shading bit and the consistent level of detail. The shading I'm not quiet able to do yet on my own so I'll do some future research on light and shadow, and as for the detail thing I think I'm going to leave as is. The huge amount of detail at the eyes makes the viewer look there first, right? Well, rather the eyes/nose first than... the rest.

Anyways! I decided to go with white but after a half an hour of deliberating I found I couldn't draw the hair for it OTL. So I'm cheating and making it a weird... hair cover thing. No idea how I'll shade it-- will figure out later. I think it looks fine-ish? I'm also planning on adding some extra purple hair sneaking out from under her hair cover thing, but I didn't illustrate that in this update:

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/8038366/dumpster/exoskeleton/6.jpg

It's been long since we met huh? @Spirit

[url=http://i50.tinypic.com/o07c0m.png]Some guide[/url]

On the left, it's the basic lineart for you to get a grasp of how thing's actually look like. ie ; her left eyebrow is definitely in wrong direction. left iris wrong position makes her look derping (no offense srsly)
On the right, it's what it looks like after i tried a quick paint over it.
imo, that hair design would be extremely hard to paint, i don't really know how it works.... orz
If you need any clarifications in terms of words you can quote/basilmail me
Good luck!

[quote=Aerogaa]Ehh. Her right cheek (left side of the picture) should be fleshed out more I think, and the angle in the jaw really annoys me for some reason. I tend to think of girls with less angular and smooth jaws, so that might just be me, but I'll still say that it doesn't look right. I prefer the jaw in your opening post.

The eyebrows seem a little high to me, but again that could be a stylistic thing. Since you said you wanted the eyebrows more realistic looking, know that they aren't fine lines (unless you draw them on like I know some girls do). They kind of fade in and out, so to speak. If you fill in the area of your eyebrows with small strokes, I think it might look more realistic.

Also the left eye (on the right side) seems to be a little bit too far angled downward to me. Maybe if you shift it a bit more clockwise it might be better, but again, I'm no leading expert in art and this could be a style choice.

But like others have said, you have a really smooth coloring and it flows really well! I can't wait to see how it looks when you color the rest of it![/quote]

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/8038366/dumpster/exoskeleton/5.jpg

I tried to hit all your points.
It's kind of obvious I can't shade anything well that's not a face OTL

Anyways, should I go with white hair or dark purple? I was planning on dark purple/black since the beginning but now I think it might look better white?

[quote=Spirit]Thank you!
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/8038366/dumpster/exoskeleton/4.jpg
Slightly better?[/quote]

Ehh. Her right cheek (left side of the picture) should be fleshed out more I think, and the angle in the jaw really annoys me for some reason. I tend to think of girls with less angular and smooth jaws, so that might just be me, but I'll still say that it doesn't look right. I prefer the jaw in your opening post.

The eyebrows seem a little high to me, but again that could be a stylistic thing. Since you said you wanted the eyebrows more realistic looking, know that they aren't fine lines (unless you draw them on like I know some girls do). They kind of fade in and out, so to speak. If you fill in the area of your eyebrows with small strokes, I think it might look more realistic.

Also the left eye (on the right side) seems to be a little bit too far angled downward to me. Maybe if you shift it a bit more clockwise it might be better, but again, I'm no leading expert in art and this could be a style choice.

But like others have said, you have a really smooth coloring and it flows really well! I can't wait to see how it looks when you color the rest of it!

The proportion of the face seems off the shape of the head.
You can just readjust that and I think it will look better, needs more space in between chin.

[quote=TheZigen]I think the problem is that you've almots completely eliminated her cheek bones, chin, and jawline. Try adding more shape to her face and that should help. Otherwise the painting job is nice![/quote]
Thank you!
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/8038366/dumpster/exoskeleton/4.jpg
Slightly better?

I think the problem is that you've almots completely eliminated her cheek bones, chin, and jawline. Try adding more shape to her face and that should help. Otherwise the painting job is nice!

try doing small strokes , i think it will look nice

looked again..
http://i45.tinypic.com/nx75uw.jpg <- some things i think should be changed