[quote=Meatbuns][url=http://i58.tinypic.com/23r1heh.jpg]idk what happened with the colors[/url] constructive criticism pls [/quote]
First let me say--wonderful drawing. I really like the color scheme. As someone who knows nil about color theory, I'm not gonna comment about the colors.. it's not my place to comment.
I'll comment on the anatomy/posing. Sorry if I ever sound too harsh--I'm very detail oriented.
First, from an anatomical standpoint, the left hand (drawing's perspective) is too small. In comparison to the wrist and forearm, the connection is too perfect. The tricep muscles on the left arm are also too far down the arm. It's also too small--make it larger. I always draw a nude figure before drawing any clothes, so I know exactly how every muscle will work and exactly how clothing will rest on the figure. The two feet are pointed in awkward positions. Not that they look bad--they still look great. However, the feet are positioned a bit too perfectly. One foot is looking straight at the viewer and the other foot has a slight tilt. I don't know what artistic term to use, but the foot on the window is essentially a profile view foot, with a single plane of rotation. In other words, from an artist's perspective, it looks like you took an easy way out--you drew the feet with as little angle as possible which makes the positioning look too staged or unnatural. The collar and the sternum (center of chest) do not line up as it should. draw a curved line down--you'll see. It also seems he has a waist a tad too small for the body. The size difference is not significant to make it look bad, but if I were to try and measure it out, it would be just a bit off. His back is not arched enough for this position. He looks very tensed up and not as relaxed. For the pant legs--you are actually pointed in the right direction for this specific photo. Since you are drawing a man with suit pants, the pant shape fits pretty well. Suit pants are typically looser and go straight down visually--they do not show the shape of the leg as much. However, keep that in mind when you draw the leg. I see some shaping and I see some ambiguity. Suit pants are very loose and, as a guy, even fitted suit pants will appear loose. No one will wear skin-tight suit pants. Since his leg is in a bent position, the pants will definitely hug the leg and show the form, but the lower leg will not have as much of a hug. Additionally, watch your clothe endings--the small "bend" outwards on the left leg without any visible folds is never a good idea unless your character is wearing disco pants. The gun doesn't seem like it rests properly within the figure. Adding more light-shadow contrast may help. I'm not entirely sure what you're going for with the gun position--work on it a bit and get back to me!
[quote=Meatbuns]@Msstopposting YA one of my greatest weakness is perspective and coloring @geologyrox: WOW this is rlly great ur rlly on point omg this is a one layer painting minus the texture so i'll have to repaint over the whole thing ahhH thats always funNN ill try to fix all the proportions, perspective, lighting and try to repost after i finish all my school stuff [url=http://i59.tinypic.com/2vjs9w0.jpg]ref i used[/url] ty for the critique and i don't really post my art anywhere (except here) qq just practicing rn[/quote] without going too in-depth (plus it's a little hard to form a mental picture of his skeletal structure in that big nerdy cardigan), it looks like you shortened the torso and it's more clear now that he's basically floating in your windowsill; his weight should be evenly distributed between his pelvis (which isn't making contact with the windowsill in your painting) and his back, which is somewhat arched and on an angle (he is leaning against the frame, in your painting he appears to be sitting up straight and looks very stiff, as if standing) and yeah, painting on one layer is almost always a bad idea. you could always start fresh or just leave it as it is and keep these things in mind for the future. reworking an image that was painted all on one layer would be a nightmare
@Msstopposting YA one of my greatest weakness is perspective and coloring @geologyrox: WOW this is rlly great ur rlly on point omg this is a one layer painting minus the texture so i'll have to repaint over the whole thing ahhH thats always funNN ill try to fix all the proportions, perspective, lighting and try to repost after i finish all my school stuff [url=http://i59.tinypic.com/2vjs9w0.jpg]ref i used[/url] ty for the critique and i don't really post my art anywhere (except here) qq just practicing rn
[quote=Meatbuns][url=http://i58.tinypic.com/23r1heh.jpg]idk what happened with the colors[/url] constructive criticism pls [/quote] i think the colors are really neat, actually the biggest things i can offer critique on are 1) perspective, most notably the window and the floor don't quite line up and as a result the window looks a little wonky and crooked, but maybe the effect was intentional. additionally, the foot on the floor appears to be on another plane and hanging limply, something i can't see being possible given his position (the windowsill looks too thin to be able to support his full weight and keep him balanced) 2) some anatomical discrepancies, his left hand appears far too small (and missing a few bones) and the arm looks like it's flexing really hard due to the dark purples on the forearm. the pelvic area seems off to me, i'd have to do an overpaint to see what the deal is but i think it might just be that he's unbalanced, his upper torso is very rigid and it seems a little unnatural. if you used a ref for this you should def post it 3) the rifle seems like it was just an afterthought; you could remove it completely and it would change nothing about his pose. i think you should take it out or incorporate it more into the pose by having him grasp it or have him interact with it in some way, as it is now i'm not understanding how it is being supported 4) this is personal preference, i already like the atmosphere of your painting but to make it a little more intense i'd bring more focus to the dude in the window by darkening the walls/areas the light wouldn't naturally touch, imo your values right now seem pretty uniform. i feel like the guy could be a little more dramatically lit instead of just having some areas highlighted and rimlit. in closing though i really like this and if you have a deviantart or anything i'd love to check it out :^)
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[quote=Msstopposting]Welcome back, art has been less active but I'M STILL HERE. That's all that matters. <3
http://jbrbly.tumblr.com/
Or search my basilID. Share your progress as well, b.[/quote]
I went creeping through your drawings.
lol @ the female warrior thingie with the huge chest.
.. and the "guy from work". c:
[quote=Meatbuns][url=http://i58.tinypic.com/23r1heh.jpg]idk what happened with the colors[/url] constructive criticism pls [/quote]
First let me say--wonderful drawing.
I really like the color scheme. As someone who knows nil about color theory, I'm not gonna comment about the colors.. it's not my place to comment.
I'll comment on the anatomy/posing. Sorry if I ever sound too harsh--I'm very detail oriented.
First, from an anatomical standpoint, the left hand (drawing's perspective) is too small. In comparison to the wrist and forearm, the connection is too perfect.
The tricep muscles on the left arm are also too far down the arm. It's also too small--make it larger. I always draw a nude figure before drawing any clothes, so I know exactly how every muscle will work and exactly how clothing will rest on the figure.
The two feet are pointed in awkward positions. Not that they look bad--they still look great. However, the feet are positioned a bit too perfectly. One foot is looking straight at the viewer and the other foot has a slight tilt. I don't know what artistic term to use, but the foot on the window is essentially a profile view foot, with a single plane of rotation. In other words, from an artist's perspective, it looks like you took an easy way out--you drew the feet with as little angle as possible which makes the positioning look too staged or unnatural.
The collar and the sternum (center of chest) do not line up as it should. draw a curved line down--you'll see.
It also seems he has a waist a tad too small for the body. The size difference is not significant to make it look bad, but if I were to try and measure it out, it would be just a bit off.
His back is not arched enough for this position. He looks very tensed up and not as relaxed.
For the pant legs--you are actually pointed in the right direction for this specific photo. Since you are drawing a man with suit pants, the pant shape fits pretty well. Suit pants are typically looser and go straight down visually--they do not show the shape of the leg as much. However, keep that in mind when you draw the leg. I see some shaping and I see some ambiguity. Suit pants are very loose and, as a guy, even fitted suit pants will appear loose. No one will wear skin-tight suit pants. Since his leg is in a bent position, the pants will definitely hug the leg and show the form, but the lower leg will not have as much of a hug. Additionally, watch your clothe endings--the small "bend" outwards on the left leg without any visible folds is never a good idea unless your character is wearing disco pants.
The gun doesn't seem like it rests properly within the figure. Adding more light-shadow contrast may help. I'm not entirely sure what you're going for with the gun position--work on it a bit and get back to me!
[quote=Meatbuns]@Msstopposting YA one of my greatest weakness is perspective and coloring
@geologyrox:
WOW this is rlly great ur rlly on point omg this is a one layer painting minus the texture so i'll have to repaint over the whole thing ahhH thats always funNN ill try to fix all the proportions, perspective, lighting and try to repost after i finish all my school stuff
[url=http://i59.tinypic.com/2vjs9w0.jpg]ref i used[/url]
ty for the critique and i don't really post my art anywhere (except here) qq just practicing rn[/quote]
without going too in-depth (plus it's a little hard to form a mental picture of his skeletal structure in that big nerdy cardigan), it looks like you shortened the torso and it's more clear now that he's basically floating in your windowsill; his weight should be evenly distributed between his pelvis (which isn't making contact with the windowsill in your painting) and his back, which is somewhat arched and on an angle (he is leaning against the frame, in your painting he appears to be sitting up straight and looks very stiff, as if standing)
and yeah, painting on one layer is almost always a bad idea. you could always start fresh or just leave it as it is and keep these things in mind for the future. reworking an image that was painted all on one layer would be a nightmare
@Msstopposting YA one of my greatest weakness is perspective and coloring
@geologyrox:
WOW this is rlly great ur rlly on point omg this is a one layer painting minus the texture so i'll have to repaint over the whole thing ahhH thats always funNN ill try to fix all the proportions, perspective, lighting and try to repost after i finish all my school stuff
[url=http://i59.tinypic.com/2vjs9w0.jpg]ref i used[/url]
ty for the critique and i don't really post my art anywhere (except here) qq just practicing rn
[quote=Meatbuns][url=http://i58.tinypic.com/23r1heh.jpg]idk what happened with the colors[/url] constructive criticism pls [/quote]
i think the colors are really neat, actually
the biggest things i can offer critique on are 1) perspective, most notably the window and the floor don't quite line up and as a result the window looks a little wonky and crooked, but maybe the effect was intentional. additionally, the foot on the floor appears to be on another plane and hanging limply, something i can't see being possible given his position (the windowsill looks too thin to be able to support his full weight and keep him balanced) 2) some anatomical discrepancies, his left hand appears far too small (and missing a few bones) and the arm looks like it's flexing really hard due to the dark purples on the forearm. the pelvic area seems off to me, i'd have to do an overpaint to see what the deal is but i think it might just be that he's unbalanced, his upper torso is very rigid and it seems a little unnatural. if you used a ref for this you should def post it 3) the rifle seems like it was just an afterthought; you could remove it completely and it would change nothing about his pose. i think you should take it out or incorporate it more into the pose by having him grasp it or have him interact with it in some way, as it is now i'm not understanding how it is being supported 4) this is personal preference, i already like the atmosphere of your painting but to make it a little more intense i'd bring more focus to the dude in the window by darkening the walls/areas the light wouldn't naturally touch, imo your values right now seem pretty uniform. i feel like the guy could be a little more dramatically lit instead of just having some areas highlighted and rimlit. in closing though i really like this and if you have a deviantart or anything i'd love to check it out :^)
Where have you guys beeeeen amg. Well, for me, I'm still the same old, whatever that mean, pft.
[url=http://i58.tinypic.com/23r1heh.jpg]idk what happened with the colors[/url] constructive criticism pls
[quote=RitoPls]Wait you were gone for two years?
Has it really been two years?[/quote]
Hmm more like 1 since last post and almost 2 since being active
Wait you were gone for two years?
Has it really been two years?
[quote=Msstopposting]Welcome back, art has been less active but I'M STILL HERE. That's all that matters. <3
http://jbrbly.tumblr.com/
Or search my basilID. Share your progress as well, b.[/quote]
Were you Rationale? I don't recognize the name but I do recognize the character look
Haven't drawn anything for about a year but
http://sta.sh/023wcihuk2lx
that's what I got after coming back
PS: you're good at backgrounds