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A comic series that i had started in the past but then promptly quit.
I am going to start it again so please enjoy.
Constructive criticism accepted.

February 23, 2011

9 Comments • Newest first

evilslasher

For some reason, I really disliked the "ahh. noo." part. I don't think anyone says that with periods... And as was previously mentioned, the action panels seemed kinda extraneous. I hope you make a good reason for the whole black blob thing.

Reply February 24, 2011
Kapel07

those 6 action clips was totally not needed, add some motion in 1 big panel and you could've added more depth
and try changing the way the character is talking, too generic and lacks any character just going 'oh dam" in one could've changed it.

Reply February 23, 2011
Fierce1XD

Panel 11 : I wish.
xD

Reply February 23, 2011
onetw0three

Uhmm for some reason I've seen this before o-o.

Reply February 23, 2011
9thbandit

Laws of grammar state that it's "you and me" instead of "you and I".

Reply February 23, 2011
ChildCrusade

I dont get what happens at the end.

Reply February 23, 2011
OB3LISK

Forget what everyone else is saying, I liked it and I am interested in your story and what will happen. I hope you will continue.

Reply February 23, 2011
ghostme

pretty interesting, looks forward to next one and the dark tranforming thingo

Reply February 23, 2011
SnailTrail

I like it, it's simple and clean.

Reply February 23, 2011