WOOTS! 2nd issue here. The story's going a little fast because I may want to finish this 'season' before Chinese New Year starts.
January 16, 2011
WOOTS! 2nd issue here. The story's going a little fast because I may want to finish this 'season' before Chinese New Year starts.
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[quote=Calvin8D]1] Unbelievably lame and generic storyline. I mean, come on. Guy goes on adventure, guy faints, wakes up in a girl's house. I can name 20 different stories and games where the exact same thing happens. Stop trying to make your story a chain of events. This is what happens when someone uneducated with literature tries to write a story. Be creative. Be original. And here are some literary elements to help you out: Metaphor, Symbolism, Foreshadowing, Voice, and Point of View.
2] Dialogue. I'm not going to elaborate on this point again. Read my criticism on the first chapter.
EDIT: fixedalolfailtypo.[/quote]
Maybe you could help build my story by PM'ing me...
just a general draft would be fine
But you could also make a comic yourself....
Edit: It's not me, it's my education system. lol. We don't know what metaphor, symbolism, foreshadowing and etc. etc. is...
[quote=Calvin8D]1] Unbelievably lame and generic storyline. I mean, come on. Guy goes on adventure, guy faints, wakes up in a girl's house. I can name 20 different stories and games where the exact same thing happens. Stop trying to make your story a chain of events. This is what happens when someone uneducated with literature tries to write a story. Be creative. Be original. And here are some literary elements to help you out: Metaphor, Symbolism, Foreshadowing, Voice, and Point of View.
2] Dialogue. I'm not going to elaborate on this point again. Read my criticism on the first chapter.
EDIT: fixedalolfailtypo.[/quote]
This isn't a novel, this is a comic. There is no need to be a literary genius. And it doesn't matter if the plot is common, all it matters is how well it was executed and if it was enjoyable (which it was).
Make more +like
I thought this was gonna be a generic basil comic, but that's a friggin mush.
I'm gonna update this comic when it reaches 70 likes or by tomorrow.
She has no pants, and they're in a bedroom.
I'm kidding.
OT: Epic Shroom is epic.
Shroom evolving into Kino, then into Orange Mushroom, then Mushmom anyone?
Not sure why but i like the comic 0.o
Sorry guys, *brought.
I rushed this a little ^^lll
[quote=Mattis1994]Typical henehoe detected[/quote]
Yeah, I know her in Galicia, she is. So am I.
Pokemon!
+1 like to you good sir. XD
[quote=Sunlight]Obviously a shroom-seller captured the Shroom. The girl, however, saw the boy collapse with the Shroom, and willingly bought the Shroom back from the salesman.
wut[/quote]
Epic Win
I like how simple and easy to follow it is
+1 Like
Typos are pro !
yay! mushies back!
Lol, i really like where this is going.
Don`t over hurry it
lol at the shroom. will he ever be eaten?
bought? shouuldnt it be brought?