20 A Day of Journey

The melody in the first part seems like it was adapted from or based of another song... possibly from a video game? Please forgive my opinion, but it sounds like a generic happy, countryside map theme from a game.

I found the second part... interesting. It feels very modern and contemporary... definitely not a classical or romantic piece. It seems like many contemporary composers love to use broken chords in their works in the left hand as an accompaniment to the melodic right hand.

Although I do not study music theory, I notice that many compositions/movements of pieces have three basic parts:

1. A sort of exposition? Basically where the main themes and such are introduced.
2. A sort of interlude? Transition between the exposition and the ending, based off of the exposition's themes, but presented in an entirely different way.
3. An ending, almost like a copy of the exposition but with several adjustments, almost always including a key change.

I was expecting an ending similar to the first part, but it seems as if you divided the piece into two parts. I'm not saying that it's a bad thing, just different. But now that I listen to it again, it feels like they belong in different movements of a composition. They just feel separate from each other. In some pieces, such as [url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V0z7mUV5rSc&feature=player_detailpage#t=120s]Schubert's Impromptu Op. 90 No. 4[/url] (which I am practicing right now) there is a fluid transition from the exposition to the interlude, but in your piece there appears to not be a transition. I believe that if you find a better way to transition between the first part and the second, it will make it appear as if they are both parts of the same movement/composition.

Not related to the composition itself, but I believe you should try to bring up the melody in your performance. It feels like the left hand, especially in the latter part, is too loud and affecting the melody. In the Impromptu's Trio (interlude) the melody is supposed to be very distinct, compared to the 5-note chords. (well, the person in the recording doesn't do an amazing job of this)

However, please note that I do not actually know anything about theory. I have been practicing the piano for seven years now (I'm twelve now) and have gotten a general sense of composition (and would like to take up composing one day, but alas, am horribly uncreative, finding myself unintentionally using ideas from previous composers whenever I try to write something of my own) but my views are not those of an expert or art critic.

I hope that my review helps you.

EDIT: Ah... pardon me... I didn't read the description.

[quote=Kazno]I liked it, it was smooth and sounded nice [/quote]

Alright; can anyone think of anything that could improve this?

I liked it, it was smooth and sounded nice