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Thanks everyone that helped
sorry i suck at grammer

Here you go. A couple things to work on:
1) use the word "just" less often
2) keep your tenses consistent

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It's a cold Tuesday morning in the middle of December. My alarm just awoke me and now I am brushing my teeth. After I was done I look in the mirror and giggle because I look all tired and pale in the morning, but I usually look happy and calm. I finish brushing my teeth and do all my other things. Another day of being the smallest grade in the school, the freshman.
My mom yells "James hurry up!" in Vietnamese.
"I'm coming!" I reply softly. Taking three steps at a time, I jump down the stairs. I grab my backpack, lanyard, and watch.
"Don't forget to drink milk" my mom reminds me. I pour a glass of milk and starting drinking it.
"Gulp gulp gulp" My mom is already outside with the car ready to go. I jump in the dark blue BMW. I hate driving around in the BMW. It makes my family look greedy. Everyone else in the area drives a Honda, Toyota, etc.
"Hello?" my friend says from the window. I snap out of my daydream and I notice I am already at school.
"Oh sorry Christy; I was thinking of something" I say embarrassingly.
"Haha its nothing! You were probably daydreaming weren't you? About me?"
"No I wasn't!" I say. My face turns all red. Christy has been my close friend since fourth grade. She's Vietnamese like me and short like me, but it sucks more to be a short guy.
We walk to our classes and, like usual, I just daydream and sleep in my classes. I don't really call myself smart with my B average. Nothing really happens until 7th period when I meet a guy named Bow who seems nice. He's a tall, buff Filipino junior with a nice tan. That period was the only period in which I don't daydream or sleep. I have a couple of laughs with him and he asked, "Yo James you wanna hang out sometime with me and my friends?"
"Sure! Can I bring a friend or two?"
"Yea you can. I gotta go, late!"
"Cya" Class ends and I feel like walking home alone today. I walk home but the walk feels ever so long. When I get home, I take a big nap and drink some orange juice. I was about to start on my homework when the phone rings. I answer it.
"Hello? Is this James?"
"Yes, may I ask who this is?"
"Its me Bow. You wanna hangout on Friday? Me and the group are gonna go to a friends house."
"Sure and how did you get my number?"
"Magic! Well late"
"late" The rest of the days until Friday are just the same as Tuesday. Daydreaming and sleeping in all my classes besides 7th period then going home and doing my homework. Christy has been telling me I'm being more lazy and boring the past couple days. I reply with the usual "Hormones."
Friday after school I go hang out with Bow and his friends and I bring Christy with me. There are about twelve people at the house including me, Christy, and Bow. The party was pretty pale until Bow pulled out a couple pills. He smiles and says
"So who's going first?"
"What is that?" I asked. Everyone else laughs besides Christy and me.
"It's a fun pill!" one of Bow's friends says. I just stare at the pill. Bow pops one, and then everyone takes one, apart from Christy and me.
"Oh what can happen" I say nervously. I grab the pill and take it.
"James! What are you doing?" Christy yelled.
"I'm just trying it out, it's not like I'm gonna make it something daily." Christy gets mad and runs out of the house angrily. I chase her outside and grab her and ask her
"What's going on?"
"You shouldn't take those things! They aren't good for you!"
"Its just one, its not like I'm making this a daily thing."
"Remember the story I told you about my cousin? He said the exact same thing you did. He's been rotting in prison for the last 14 years."
"I'm sorry. I forgot about that." She cuts me off and runs. I just sit in front of the house for a bit then I walk home. When I get home I started feeling very weird. I keep smiling for no reason and things randomly move. My mom asks me if I'm okay and I tell her I'm just feeling tired. I feel dizzy after a couple hours and go to sleep early.
Saturday and Sunday are a blur for me. I stay home and go to YMCA to play basketball. On Monday, I meet Christy as school and try to apologize to her.
"Christy! I'm so sorry! I promise I won't take another one!"
"Good, you'd better not!" she replies with a very low sad tone. She then gives me a little punch to the arm and just like that we have a nice lunch. We laugh and have some interesting conversations. Sixth period is boring; I', day dreaming like always. Then 7th period came.
"James what the hell happened on Friday? You just bailed on us and didn't even stay long enough for the pill to start."
"Sorry man, it won't happen again. I had some girl problems." I replied softly.
"No problem, next time you decide to just bail like that remember to not take the pill. I don't want you wasting my supply" I just nod. After that we just go back to joking and laughing.
The next couple weeks are like usual: school, home, and friends' houses. I feel like I betrayed Christy because I took a couple of drugs without her knowing. My mom and dad keep asking me if I'm ok and I always say the same thing "hormones" but one day my parents got worried because I came home with my eyes all red.
"Son are you ok? You been very tired the past couple weeks." my dad asks, worried.
"It's nothing! Something just went into my eye."
"Are you sure? Christy told me that you have been acting very differently in school" my mom yells.
"I'm fine mom! Christy has also been acting weird" I lied. My parents just believed me and I went to sleep. I need to learn when is the right time to take them.
The past couple weeks I have gotten very close to Bow. He's like a brother to me now. He always has got my back and everything. I don't really like all of his other friends. I think they are annoying poseurs.
"Ring ring ring" I pick up the phone.
"Hello" I say.
"Hey James, its me Christy"
"Hey Christy! What's up?"
"Nothing much. I have something to tell you. I don't think we should be friends anymore. You have been acting differently and you're starting to slip away from me."
"Huh wait what? Slow down! It's just hormones. I'll be back to normal before you know it."
"That's what you always say. Have you been taking more drugs? And don't lie to me; I know when you are lying." She yells.
"Uhh just a few weak ones." I said scared.
"That's it! You promised. James, from now on we are not friends! Don't even talk to me again" She hangs up. I just stare at the wall and think about how much of a fool I was. I cry that night. I can't sleep the whole entire night. In the morning while drinking some orange juice I thought to myself, "I don't need her! Friends come and go these days. I can make knew ones."
At school I hang out with Bow and his friends. I don't feel right in the group but I have nowhere else to go. A couple of weeks pass, horrible weeks; the only thing on my mind is Christy. I get half the sleep I usually do and can never fall asleep in class anymore. My grades are slipping by a lot; my B average went to a C- average. My parents are on my nerves about everything. I just ignore them, they don't know what's good for me.
Next day at school I see Bow and we start talking.
"Sup James, man we gotta go to this party so we can get some hook ups"
"Ok man where and what time?"
"Tonight! Sorry couldn't tell you earlier"
"No problem. I'll just tell my parents I'm studying at your house"
"Ok then, I'll give you a ride after school." After school, Bow gives me a ride to his house and we chill there and take some pills. Later, at around seven, we drive over to this big house.
"Damn, we gonna deal with rich snobby kids?" I say.
"Hey don't forget you're one too" he jokes. He finds a parking spot and we go inside. The house is packed with people who look like they're between about fourteen and twenty one years old. A guy bumps into me and spills some beer on me.
"What the hell dude!" I yell at him.
"Sorry little man" the Caucasian guy says.
" I'm not little!" I yell, then I punch him across the face, and then he and I get into a little fight. Both of us throw a couple punches at each other then two of his friends start getting at me too. I look over at Bow and he just looks at me and laughs. I'm very shocked; I just give up and the guys keep going at me, throwing punch after punch. I faint.
I wake up and look around, knew it! I'm in the hospital. My vision started to clear and I noticed that my mom is asleep on a chair right next to me. I awaken my mom and asked her what happened.
"James I can't believe you went to a party when you told me you were studying with a friend. You're not going anywhere for the next year!" she yells at me.
"Sorry I ..." my mom cuts me short.
"Don't say sorry! I know you're not sorry; just get some rest. I'm going to go to work." She left the hospital room I'm in. The two days I stay at the hospital are terrible. I just watch TV the entire time. I find out my head was damaged and I got a broken nose.
The first day of school I got back from the hospital is terrible. Everyone's looking at me and saying things about me. I go to Bow and try to talk to him but he just laughs at me.
"Haha it's James! Fool you look like a mess."
"It's not funny! Why didn't you help me out at the party?" I ask.
"Why would I risk hurting myself for a thing like you? I can get another you anytime I want. You guys are fresh meat and I get some more anytime I want to." Bow says while laughing like a pig. I start crying after he said that and I ran away.
The next day I try to look for Christy. I finally find her.
"Christy please take me back I'm sorry."
"Haha, that's what you get. I gave you enough chances. I told you to get out of my life" she says with a laugh. After she says that I just start choking from shock. My lungs feel bigger. Then I faint.

James died that day from a heart attack. He had been using too much drugs which caused him to have a weaker heart. Even after he died Christy was miserable and regretted ever saying what she said. Bow didn't care, and after a couple months couldn't even remember his name. "Who really is your friend?"

Spelling isn't the same as grammar, guys.

I guess i can pick up partially where that guy left off. Sec.

EDIT:
Kay.

The rest of the days were just the same as Tuesday. Day dreaming and sleeping in all my classes besides 7th period, then going home and doing my homework. Christy has been telling me I've been more lazy and boring the past couple days. I replied with the usual "Hormones."
Friday after school, I go hangout with Bow and his friends and I bring Christy with me. There was about twelve people at the house including me, Christy, and Bow. The party was pretty pale until Bow pulled out a couple pills. He smiles and says, "So who's going first?"
"What is that?" I asked. Everyone else laughed besides Christy and me.
"It's a fun pill!" One of Bow's friends said. I just stare at the pill. Bow pops one, and then everyone took one except Christy and me.
"Oh, what can happen?" I said nervously. I grab the pill and take it.
"James! What are you doing?" Christy yelled.
"I'm just trying it out, it's not like I'm gonna make it something daily."
Christy gets mad and runs out of the house angrily. I chase her outside and grab her and ask her, "What's going on?"
"You shouldn't take those things! They aren't good for you!"
"It's just one, its not like I'm making this a daily thing."
"Remember the story I told you about my cousin? He said the exact same thing you did. He's been rotting in prison for the last 14 years."
"I'm sorry I forgot about that-" she cut me off and ran. I just sat in front of the house for a bit then I walked home. When I came home I started feeling very weird. I kept smiling for no reason and things would randomly move. My mom asked me if I was ok, and I told her I was just feeling tired. I felt dizzy after a couple hours and went to sleep early.
Saturday and Sunday was just like a blur for me. I just stayed home and went to the YMCA to play basketball. On Monday, I met Christy at school and tried to apologize to her.
"Christy! I'm so sorry! I promise I won't take another one!"
"Good, you better not!" she replied with a very low sad tone. She then gives me a little punch to the arm and just like that we had a nice lunch. We laughed and had some interesting conversations. 6th period was boring, I was day dreaming like always. Then 7th period came.
"James what the hell happened on Friday? You just bailed on us and didn't even stay long enough for the pill to start."
"Sorry man, it won't happen again, had some girl problems." I replied softly.
"No problem, next time you decide to just bail like that remember to not take the pill. I don't want you wasting my supply" I then just nodded. After that we just went back to joking and laughing.
The next couple weeks were like usual, school, home, and friends house. I felt like I betrayed Christy because I took a couple of drugs without her knowing. My mom and dad keep asking me if I'm ok and I always said the same "hormones." But one time my parents got worried because I came home one day with my eyes all red.
"Son, are you ok? You been very tired the past couple weeks." my dad asked worried.
"It's nothing! Something just went into my eye."
"Are you sure? Christy told me that you have been acting very differently in school," my mom yelled.
"I'm fine mom! Christy has also been acting weird," I lied. My parents just believed me and I went to sleep. I need to learn when is the right time to take them.
The past couple weeks I have gotten very close to Bow. He's like a brother to me now. He always got my back and everything. All of his other friends I don't really like. I think they are annoying posers.
[i]Ring ring ring[/i]
I pick up the phone.
"Hello?" I said
"Hey James, it's me, Christy."
"Hey Christy! What's up?"
"Nothing much. I have something to tell you. I don't think we should be friends anymore. You have been acting differently and your starting to slip away from me.
"Huh? Wait what? Slow down! It's just hormones! I'll be back to normal before you know it!"
"That's what you always say. Have you been taking more drugs? And don't lie to me, I know when you are lying," She yells.

Yeah, i got tired.

I'll fix your grammar, but this story is not well written. I can only fix the grammatical mistakes, not the holes in your writing. Also, I'm not a grammar guru and I probably left a good hand full of mistakes. There is something about verb tense agreement I never understood, someone else will need to fix that.

It's a cold Tuesday morning in the middle of December. My alarm just woke me up and now I am brushing my teeth. After I was done, I looked in the mirror and giggled. I looked all tired and pale in the morning, but I usually look happy and calm. I finished brushing my teeth and do all my other things. I prepared for another day of being the smallest grade in the school, the freshman.
My mom yells,"James hurry up!" in Vietnamese.
"I'm coming!" I replied softly, taking three steps at a time as I jumped down the stairs. I grab my backpack, lanyard, and watch.
"Don't forget to drink milk," my mom reminded me. I poured a glass of milk and started drinking it.
My mom was already outside with the car ready to go. I jumped in the dark blue BMW. I hated driving around in the BMW because it makes my family look like greedy people. Everyone else around the area drove Honda, Toyota, and etc.
"Hello?" my friend said from the window. I snapped out of my day dream and I noticed I was already at school.
"Oh sorry Christy, I was thinking of something..." I said embarrassingly.
"Ha-ha its nothing! You were probably daydreaming weren't you? About me?"
"No I wasn't!" I said. My face then turned all red. Christy has been my close friend since 4th grade. She's Vietnamese and short like me but it sucks more to be a short guy.
We walk to our classes and like usual I just daydream and sleep in my classes. I don't really call myself smart with my B average. Nothing really happened until 7th period, where I met a guy named Bow that seemed nice. He's a tall, buff Filipino junior, with a nice tan. That period was the only period I didn't daydream or sleep in.
I had a couple of laughs with him and he asked, "Yo James you wanna hangout sometime with me and my friends?"
"Sure! Can I bring a friend or two?"
"Yeah you can. I gotta go, late!"
"See ya," Class ended and I felt like walking home alone today. I walked home but the walk felt ever so long. When I got home, I took a big nap and drank some orange juice. I was about to start on my homework, then the phone rang. I picked it up.
"Hello? Is this James?"
"Yes, may I ask who this is?"
"It's me, Bow. You want to hangout on Friday? The group and I are going to go to a friends house."
"Sure, and how did you get my number?"
"Magic! Well late!"
"Late."

Oh well, just noticed how long that is. Sorry, I give up. I have other things to do

I will read that later.

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i forgot this is the basil community

My English teacher will tell you to stop using to be verbs.