General

Well, your problem is that the way you set up your sentence is not kind to the point you want to make, a point that is compounded by your limited word choice. This winds up giving you a sentence that's set up rather awkwardly and is further weighed down by the redundancy in your words.

To start with, "it also proves" feels too passive, especially when you want to assert that something was proven or gives substance to your argument. You want something more immediate, which, by the way, also has the pleasant side-effect of reducing the number of words that are currently clunking up the flow of the sentence:

"Furthermore these lines also evoke a sense of pride--or even defiance--in the face of tribulation, as the narrator boldly asserts that even if disrespected to the point of being "in the very dirt," she will be able to not only overcome her adversity but even have the capacity to turn any challenge to her advantage as evidenced by likening herself to dust. Though at first the presence of the word "dust" appears to concede defeat, as it not only invokes images of ruin and even death, it even highlights the severity of the difficulties that she may come to face, as the previous verse describes the explicitly violent act of being trod on dirt, which, if it results in the narrator being reduced to nothing but dust--something that is even smaller and more meaningless than dirt--it appears to suggest that her trials have truly overtaken her; however, such dreary conclusions are immediately dispelled as the poet notes that even something that would seem to denote utter defeat is capable of rising--indeed, it is the very frailty and minute size of dust that lends itself to its ability to soar beyond the confines it would have faced had it remained mere dirt."

This is what I would have written had it been my essay. Please do not steal it as I doubt your writing is anything like mine, but I do hope it gives you an idea of what sort of thing you should be aiming to write.

It also proves that pride is the emotional tone. She puts a lot of effort in order to no be disrespected. It means she is prideful and respect herself.

Alright i'll post more of it.

"Still I Rise," by Maya Angelou, is a poem about a black woman, who is proud and confident despite the history of slavery, and cruelty, that her ancestors had to suffer and the abuse she had suffered as well by uncolored people. The poem is in verse due to the structure, rhythm, and rhyme, and the speaker explains how she will never be depressed even if she is a target of racism. In the poem the speaker seems very tenacious and confident which makes the emotional tone pride. The theme of the poem is to fight for the respect you deserve which speaks for the African Americans who have experienced racism.

The poetic devices used in the poem are similes, hyperboles, and imagery which are used to emphasize her tenacity, how she is treated unfairly by uncolored people, and her pride. Firstly, the speaker uses a simile in the quotation, "You may trod me in the very dirt/ But still, like dust, I'll rise," (3-4). The speaker explains that even if she is treated with excessive cruelty, she will not be discouraged from fighting back against the abuser. This quotation emphasizes her tenacity, because being able to fight back in a situation that seems hopeless is a testament to her determination in trying to achieve equality. It also proves that the emotional tone is pride because she puts a lot of effort to not be disrespected which means she respects herself. Therefore, she must be prideful.

Also guys ik I thought it was kinda weird about pride being the emotional tone at first but my teacher said it was alright.
first paragraph is the introduction and the 2nd paragraph is a small part of the first body paragraph. Also o.0 it isnt plagiarism that you guys are helping me on it right? Kind of like a normal edit just through online..

It also proves that the emotional tone is pride. The ridiculous amount of effort she exerts to spare herself from disrespect totally supports this man.

[quote=Only12]it also proves that the emotional tone is pride, as she exerts copious effort to avoid disrespect. Her respecting herself reflects her [i]pridefulness[/i] (probably not a word)[/quote]

Just googled it. Pridefulness does seem to be a word.

it also proves that the emotional tone is pride, as she exerts copious effort to avoid disrespect. Her respecting herself reflects her [i]pridefulness[/i] (probably not a word)
"pride" is probably not a emotional tone, but "prideful" is. However, "prideful" does not mean, in context, exactly the same as "pride"

not answering your question in full, but

i don't think pride isn't an emotional tone

the tone might imply a prideful personality or something like that, but i don't think it's an emotional tone

Thanks might think of using that.

t also proves that the emotional tone is pride, because she puts a lot of effort to not be disrespected. She respects herself, therefore she must be prideful.