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VENDETTAS no apostrophe unless you're talking about someone named Vendetta

[quote=VulcanWalker]My English teacher is teaching us how to write an essay on a story similar to this. This is a longshot, but is the story you're talking about "The Interlopers"[/quote]

aha no we are doing the snake by Ervin D. Krause and the celebration by W.D. Valgardson

Is this a professional scholarly essay, or some fiction short story? If it's the former, you should stick to something less epic. You can draw in attention without sounding cheesy. Doesn't [url=http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/As_We_May_Think]"As We May Think"[/url] accomplish this?

[quote=xxryzinxx]Its about 2 characters and them hurting someone else and themselves. It also has to be in literary present tense. D: sorry if you can help a bit more I'd really appreciate it.[/quote]

My English teacher is teaching us how to write an essay on a story similar to this. This is a longshot, but is the story you're talking about "The Interlopers"

[quote=XxidrisxX]First of all, If you think its good then go with it.
Second of all No its not good.
Thats just wayy to short man.
And it doesnt really describe the topic and not a good hook.
Maybe you can go with something like : "Revenge, Revenge has destroyed family's and homes, has torn apart countries, ETC"
OR : " Revenge, Revenge has been with us since the day humanity existed, Revenge gives us nothing"
Well,
Hope i helped [/quote]

Its about 2 characters and them hurting someone else and themselves. It also has to be in literary present tense. D: sorry if you can help a bit more I'd really appreciate it.

You forgot the parenthesis.

Vendetta's will h)urt.

what what.. Vendetta>>'<<s will hurt?
I'm not native American or anything but that looks wrong to me

Vendetta's will hurt. Rofl

I think a plain "Revenge hurts" sounds better

not really

try transformer revenge of the fallen